All Talk. No Action


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When Hadley Price stops talking, be afraid. Be very afraid.

From the desk of W. J. Onufer…

My writing style in the Tales of the Vampire Hadley Price books is dilogue-heavy. It’s nothing I planned. It just worked out that way. I just write a lot of damn dialogue. The characters tell me stuff and a lot of that stuff is what they say.

This has come in handy for those times that I wrote scripts used in the Byron Chronicles online audio dramas. Series producer, Eric Busby, has generously allowed my little Vampire gal, Hadley Price, to periodically be a guest character in those on-going, fun-spooky audio episodes. And I loved writing Hadley in those. Truth be told, I never wrote in play format before writing for Eric. It was a something new and experimental for me. And I must have faked that pretty good because any feed-back on scripts I sent Eric had no mention of how I formated that. On that, at least, no correction was needed. So a dialogue-heavy writing style went a long way to adapt to being a playwright.

Some may suggest that a story with a lot of dialogue may be indicative of a story that lacks action. And I’ll address that concern a little later here in relation to the Tales of the Vampire Hadley Price books.

But the point of that is a good one. In the real world, there are those are all talk and no action. And there are people who are braggarts who make a lot of noise in self-promotion. No matter what question is asked of them, they turn it around and loudly talk about themself. But after the talk, there’s no action follow-up.

This is exemplified no better than in the current president of the United States.

Braggarts are nothing new. I’m giving way my age when I say I was teen-ager in the 1970s. There were loud-talking people back then as well. And for me, as a teen-aged guy back then, two men were the prime examples of motor-mouth self-promoters. They were loud and in your face. Two men- Evel Knievel and Muhammad Ali . For young people who have never heard of either of these guys, Goggle them. Very interesting dudes, both.

Either one of them could go one-on-one with Donald Trump in the self-promotion department. There were both in that league. The fact that Muhammad Ali did that with charm and charisma that the other two didn’t match, in my mind, made him the true master of that.

But there’s one important difference between the likes of Donald Trump and the likes of Evel Knievel and Muhammad Ali . When Muhammad Ali  was done talking, he got in the ring and won fights. When Evel Knievel was done talking talking, he got on his motorcycle, flew in mid-air and land safely after jumping long distances. Sure, sometimes things didn’t work out when they each tried that. But both had the panache to back up everything they said. And they had the bravery to face failure when they didn’t succeed and the public saw that. Muhammad Ali and Evel Knievel were macho dudes, the real thing, true bad-asses that made them legends, not just because they did something that was difficult, but also, in their failures, they stepped-up and tried. Not just talk. Action personified.

I see no such follow-up after loud talk by Donald Trump. All talk. No action. Panache not achieved, not just because his words are empty but also because the man has no charm at all. Forget Eminem. Muhammad Ali, back in his day, would blow away Donald Trump in a contest of the spoken word.

(No disrespect intended to Eminem.)

Speaking of panache and the charming woman who has it in spades- don’t let the dialogue-heavy content of the Tales of the Vampire Hadley Price books fool you. When Hadley Price stops talking, be afraid. Be very afraid. Vampire action personified. Bloody will flow.

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A Vampire, An Editor and a bunch of Beta Readers

From the desk of W. J. Onufer…

Testing…testing…Is this thing on?

Ah. Yes. So I’m back. My last entry in this was back in July. Where have I gone? Nowhere. I’ve just been a huge slacker who hasn’t updated this. So now I’m back. Hadley’s been rather annoyed that I haven’t kept up with this. And generally speaking you don’t want to make a habit of annoying the Vampire Hadley Price.


A few thoughts about Editors verses Beta Readers.

But first a short-version update on what’s been happening here at Tales of the Vampire Hadley Price since July.

Hadley second book, The Family Eternal: Part One has been released. It’s a short-novel available as an e-book only. You can get order that, as well as Hadley’s first full-length novel, Beckman’s Folly by clicking on this link-

In October, My little Vampire gal was, once again, a guest character in the Byron Chronicles audio drama. It’s a two-part Halloween episode entitled The Dawn of ’78. Series producer, Eric Busby and I collaborated on writing the script. What’s it about? The Vampire Hadley Price and Byron, the Paleman of Portand have a run-in with zombies. And not just zombies, but zombie in a shopping mall. I was a lot of fun to write. You’ll have fun listening to it. You can do that by clicking on this link-

The Byron Chronicles – Halloween Special – The Dawn of ’78 – Part 1: Patient Zero

Now to the issue of Editors verses Beta Readers.

Why this topic? For the last few months, my Editor, Christine Piesyk, and I have been editing Torch, the next full-length Tales of the Vampire Hadley Price novel. It’s been rather intense. And that may go a long way in explaining why I’ve been absent from updating here. In either case, we’re looking at a release date of that some time after the beginning of the year.

The editing of Beckman’s Folly was my first experience with something I wrote that was book-length. In retrospect, the editing of it was fairly smooth. And editing of The Family Eternal: Part One was a walk in the park.

With the smooth editing experience of my first two books, I may have been a little cocky when I went into editing Torch. Christine, my Editor, soon issued me huge does of humility that cured me of that cockiness. I won’t go into detail, except to say that substantial changes were made to the manuscript. The content of the story wasn’t altered. The way it was told, however, was. Christine slapped me around pretty good on this.

So editing has consumed my life’s energy recently. And Hadley’s over my shoulder having a big laugh as I stumble through this.

It got me to thinking about a thread on an online forum I participated in a year or so back. In that forum, someone said that they didn’t need an Editor to look at what they’re written because they have 20 Beta Readers.

Now, a definitions of terms might be necessary. If you don’t know what a Beta Reader is, allow me to explain. A Beta Reader is someone who reads an unpublished manuscript and is asked for their opinion about it. Generally speaking, a Beta Reader is not a writer. They just like to read. And generally their feed-back is about content.

An Editor is a reader as well. But an Editor is also a writer. And writers are a totally different kind of animal than a reader. An Editor is a professional. What they do is very esoteric. And frankly, after seeing the magic that Christine does to make my writing better, I have to say that they are the unsung heros of books. 90% of Christine’s feed-back has nothing to do with content. Instead, it has everything to do with the technical side of writing.

A reader may sense that something isn’t quite right in a manuscript, but not know precisely what that is. But an Editor will know exactly what’s wrong. And not just that, but also know how to fix it.

Put it this way- would you bring in 20 home-owner, weekend fix-it men to repair a problem with your pipes or a Professional Plumber?

That, and I would never send out an unpublished manuscript of mine to 20 people. I have 3 Beta Readers on my Tales of the Vampire Hadley Price team. I trust each of them. Can anyone say they know 20 people well enough and trust each one so nothing in the way of theft or plagiarism would ever happen?

Maybe the person expressing that opinion never worked with a great Editor. If they did, they would never say that a bunch of Beta Readers could replace one Editor. It’s been my good fortune to be associated with Christine, one kick-ass Editor. I couldn’t have done all of this without her.

That, and Hadley likes Christine. So I have to be nice to my Editor. Generally speaking you don’t want to make a habit of annoying the Vampire Hadley Price. Or your Editor, for that matter…





The Vampire Hadley Price in The Byron Chronicles

From the desk of W. J. Onufer…

My little Vampire gal, Hadley Price, is a now guest character in the popular online audio drama The Byron Chronicles: A Year in the Life. Series producer, Eric Busby and I wrote the script. The episode is call The Hand. What happens when two formidable characters come face-to-face? Click on the link to listen or download to find out.




The Vampire Hadley Price and Byron the Paleman of Portland



The Vampire Hadley Price will be a guess character in Eric Busby’s The Byron Chronicles

From the desk of W. J. Onufer…

A major announcement!

All of us here at Tales of the Vampire Hadley Price are totally psyched to be part of very exciting, one-off, side project. Truth be told, I’ve been keeping this under my hat for a couple months now. It’s been everything I could do to not say anything about it.

But now I can.

Eric Busby, the genius behind the fantastic Byron Chronicles audio drama series approached me and asked if I’d be interested in writing an episode of the Byron Chronicles. Now understand, to my way of thinking, Eric is the Steven Spielberg of the audio drama world. And I? I’m just a writer who put out his first book less than a year ago. Eric’s been producing great Byron audio dramas for years. Hadley and I are still new to all of this.

To say it was a big deal for me is a major understatement. After I recovered from my heart attack and scraped myself off the floor, I told him, yes, I’d love to do that. Two days later I sent him the script. There was one big thing that I was concerned about as I waited for him to respond. The story I wrote for him had my main character, the Vampire Hadley Price, in an encounter with his main character, Byron, the Pale Man of Portland. How would that fly?

As it turned out, he liked my script. The inclusion of my main character wasn’t an issue one way or another. He generously allowed Hadley into Byron’s World.

Hadley insists that she allowed Byron into her world. And since I wouldn’t want to piss-off Hadley or Byron, I won’t confirm that.

In either case, an Eric Busby audio drama production of my story will be posted soon. It features David Ault as Byron and Natilie Van Sistine as Hadley. It’ll be the next story the Byron Chronicles: A Year in the Life series.

Many thanks to Eric Busby.

Here’s a link to the first story in that series that was released just a couple days ago.